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Post by Wachter on Dec 22, 2014 11:09:53 GMT -5
The first issue shall be posted later today and the second soon after. Only mildly disappointed in it. Not for any quality reasons mind you. The beginning goes to places I hadn't thought it would and ended up being funny instead of serious. I think it works. Issue also went on longer than expected (mostly because of previously mentioned prologue). Had a bunch of people to introduce. My personal favorite was left off for Issue 2 or some other issue. Given my choice of Rogues so far, I'll leave you to guess who that is. Yes. The Lullaby backup is meant to be that short. There's a reason for that which should become clearer with the second issue. Edit: I think I know what's wrong with my scene breaks. They'll be fixed in the future. |
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Post by buck on Dec 23, 2014 11:45:26 GMT -5
Just reading and responding on this issue.
Interesting opening with the time storm very comic-y.
Owen's introduction scene was kind of weak. You usually interject a ton of personality into characters from their first scene. Owen didn't pop as much as other characters have for you in the past.
The Allen and Thawne scene was intriguing mostly because I assumed the Flash was dead due to the introductory scene. Looking forward to seeing where the story moves from here. (Slight error you have blew the door of it's hinges instead of off.)
Interesting bit with Elle and the curator. The curator's final command was a little unclear which kind of stopped me in my tracks momentarily.
The final scene with Owen tied the issue together nicely. Though I'm glad you plan on releasing these quickly as at this point I have nothing, but questions. Overall, I felt the opening issue was well done, but not what I would expect from a Flash title. I think I know the direction you are going though and I feel like most of my concerns will be alleviated in future installments.
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Post by Wachter on Dec 23, 2014 13:19:42 GMT -5
-Owen
Yeah. Definitely weak to my eyes. I usually start things off with a bang and then pan the camera out wide or rewind the footage but this time I'm trying to tell a more straight forward story in a linear fashion (bit ironic given my story ideas and the time keeping... hehe). He's not as "outrageous" as Thawne and Allen plus he was giving boring duties for this issue. Ultimately, it kinda fits because a rhapsody is supposed to be contrasting and he's the serious/straight character yet at the same time he's just standing there until it is time to start the fireworks.
-Allen and Thawne
Fixed it cause of the punchline.
-Elle/Curator
Took a moment for me to realize what was wrong. I left off a word. "Get SOMEWHERE safe." The objective here is to point out that normally you'd help the person to safety instead of telling them. But of course he did that for REASONS.
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Post by hawksmoor on Jan 12, 2015 15:21:58 GMT -5
Wacther, so sorry, it seems that my review didn't make it to this thread.
The story was good, I like the build up from Owen to the Flashes. I think I see what you did there, with Owen being the counter-point to the insanity. He is the sort of moorings for the reader to sit with, our view point while this weird stuff is going down around us.
The Mystery of the Flashes, is interesting, we don't often see Thawne and Allen as chappies, so it's a dynamic that is interesting. Two differently powered (?) Flashes working together, at least for the time being.
The Flash Museum, I assume Flashes have been around for a while? I'm sure things will become clearer as the series progresses. So, all in all, i did enjoy the content of the issue, I just had a bit of an issue with the Authorial voice in this one. It was one step removed form everything and it felt kind of, detached from the actual story - I get why you'd want that effect a little bit, First Person might be too difficult in terms of maintaining the mystery, or at least frustrating for the reader.
I just didn't really get on with it. Felt kind of distracting, to me. Also, I felt the scene at the start was very much embedded in that voice, and it drew away from the story - the actual focus on characters pared it back a bit, but...yes. I hope that this doesn't cause offense, I just..didn't enjoy that element.
Looking forward to the next part.
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